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Red baby swing,
old porch ceiling,
no children
no knotted noose creekings,
just pink fading plastic
and empty body contours
fried to a silence on sophmore street.

Somewhere in the distance,
hacked up like mucus in the sweet
honeysuckle bushes that stick all over the
"tobacco free school" sign,
cigarettes light up the toy's
once faithful companion with brown ash and
acid, self-annihlation; all convieniently stationed
beneath the dumb gum trees.

and in his sister's stomach is an accident
that sent her down the street in pieces,
wickedly loose like old latex balloons,
back home to the old house and it's
greying grandmothered steps;

beneath the scrutany of the glaring
white cross of the seminary
just past the tops of the trees,
and constantly watched by the

red baby swing,
hanging from the old porch ceiling.
No more children destined to its fading,
just her knotted noose creeking
above the pink , fading plastic that strangles
in the suffocating sunlight of the morning
that casts an empty contour of her body in shadows
on sophmore street.
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Author's Comments

What the street's real name is, i'm not sure.. but everyone just calls it sophmore street. It has been a source of a few of my writings since i moved here to NC. Since a lot of kids can't afford parking and/or the school ran out of spots, they all park on this one street in a neighborhood adjacent to the school. The houses are all very old, and have the potential of being quite beautiful, but a lot of them have just been let go, falling to pieces and the yards are filled with random items that must have accumulated over the years.
Old places and stuff like that always makes you wonder the stories of the people who live there, so here's a version of the tail of the one white house, that always has a tabby cat on the front porch, and an old fisher-price sort of baby swing, that was red at one time.. but now sits there stationary , still hanging from the ceiling. though, i've never seen any children there.


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:iconcercle-vicieux:
Personally I think this is a great piece of art. The lines are fluid to my brain! A+ work there.
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thanks very much, i'm really fond of this one poem it means a lot to me. thanks for your compliment :hug:

<33 elle

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:iconburiedalivebylove666:
I really like it. The way you used your words was great Im gonna add this to my favs and check out your gallary perhaps
:iconlyingdreamer:
This is beautiful. The imagery and the figurative language weave together flawlessly.

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One day, everyone will close their eyes at once. Stars will all change places, colors will go grayscale, and some divine hand will steal our wallets. When we open our eyes again, everything will go back to normal but we'll never get our wallets back.
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thanks so much :hug:

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thank ye kindly :D

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i really like this piece - it's sonically and visually enticing. my only caution would be to watch your linebreaks and make sure each one really stands for something. try reading it aloud emphasizing the breaks and see how it feels. but seriously, one of my favorite bits by you - it's so vivid!

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thanks for the advice :D

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